Very catchy tune. I enjoyed the buildup, and the main melody was very uplifting. The kicks were chosen well and the bass did a good job of keeping the feeling moving. I do feel like the snares rolls were a bit thrown in though.
Overall very good work.
Tt takes a long time to even get going. And when it gets going it doesn't really inspire me to move or dance, and it doesn't suck you in like a trance song either. The beat itself isn't driving enough to warrant how repetitive it is. The main hook like isn't very catchy either. It's a well put together piece, as far as the balance of sound goes, just boring.
Also, why call it mushrooms?
Sorry for the somewhat harsh review but I like to be honest. Feel free to review my work and be honest as well.
Definitely good, but maybe not accurate.
I actually think the guitar solos are TOO intense. they are so fast and energetic that it feels like someone would be trying to kill him instead of killing himself or something. It feels like a struggle, not really a sacred ritual.
I realize you wanted it to be tense but realize there are different kinds of tension. tension can be fear, physical struggle, hard choice, loss, deception, etc etc. make sure you get the right kind.
This is a fine work, very good piece, but I really don't feel like the guitar solos fit. everything else fits really well, but they are just too much for me.
it may have worked if the guitar solo's was the fight he lost, and therefore lost his honor and had to kill himself, but you said it already started after that decision was made.
It sounds like I may be splitting hairs, but you posted this on OCremix as well which makes me think you want it to be a theme for a game scene or something, and it's really important that you get across the emotions as accurately as possible to heighten the awesomeness of the experience.
I can understand your thought about it. Although to me, if I get a flesh wound from let's say a knife, the nerves in my body SCREAM out and I can feel an intense pain even if I don't show it. When you insert a mid-long blade into your stomach and cut your stomach open and twist the blade. Even if for a noble reason, the feeling of pain is very intense. And only extreme tensions like the solos can to me, describe that feeling in that way. I mean, imagine falling with your face into asphalt, moments later your nerves are SCREAMING in pain. Anyways, thanks for listening and giving it thought. Appreciate it!
PS: No, nothing for video-game's in mind for this track.
What the guy below me said
It's a very well made song, and I like the melody alot. The whole time I just kept waiting for some intense synth to kick in and take over, I guess since thats the common style.
Could use a bit more bass imo.
Good beat, not so good melody
First two minutes are kind of boring. You build it up alot with simply repitition, I'm not very fond of the "voices" i don't know if it actually voices, but whatever it is that sounds like guys going ah ah ah ah, uh uh uh uh. Would have been cooler if you had a synth do it imo.
You did get a good beat going for a while there, but you didn't really develop the melody very well. it just repeated over and over and over.
Don't worry about being able to lay down a good beat and getting effects in there, you can do that. Work on keeping the melodic+harmonic line interesting. it gets old pretty fast. It's like you are hiding repetitive music behind effects and a beat. you want to use the beat and effects to ENHANCE a good melody, not hide it.
thanks bro, its a pretty old song and by no means is it a masterpeice. i didnt really have much structure to begin with, glad you could give it some fair judgment.
You really sent the message you wanted to. I got a sense of mourning from it, but also a feeling of relief, knowing the worst is over.
Reminds me of final fantasy tactics. would be a good credits song.
So happy I've managed to get my message across through lines and dots on a page
Sorry I took so long
Hey I just recently checked my inbox, sorry I took so long.
I don't really remember what I commented about last time, so I'll just cover stuff in here exclusively.
At the start, the intro feels a bit a rushed. I think that was to match the middle of the song where the tempo feels more appropriate. I really enjoyed how it picked up around 1:20 but don't make the intro worse, just speed it up during that gong part instead of making the first part sound weird.
The quality is a bit lacking, but it has a certain charm to it.
Originally I didn't like the flute as the solo thing, but It kind of grew on me. Maybe use a different instrument for the intro instead of the flute. I really liked it once the song picked up though.
Overall I remember had alot more comments the last time, so I'm pretty sure you improved ALOT! :D
I just think you could make it a bit louder (The whole thing) most of my other thoughts are just opinions.
String quality sounds alot better this time, And you have a much much better ending this time.
I enjoyed the drums and the song had a good theme going for it.
Remember there is always room for improvement, but good job!
I really appreciate your comments. And thanks for having another listen
Good music, bad sounds
Your problem isn't with getting a good tune together, you can do that. you have an issue with making the tune sound good, via equalization and mixing and balance and all that junk. most of your instruments quality is lacking. try and explore instrument styles and adjust some equalization.
Also your bass could use a boost.
thanks bud , ill take your advice
I downloaded this a while ago, and my music got wiped, and I could not find this song for the life of me. I thought it was Across the waterfall, not over the waterfall and i was sad.
However i remembered the song title and now i am again happy.
This song of yours has really captured me, and im surprised you didn't get alot more attention .
My piece called "autumn odyssey" was actually made to see if i could make anything as good as this :D
Look foward to more epicness from you.
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