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[Eternity [Techno]]

It's decent

Well, It has a pretty good tune, but it lacks the shine and polish of a great song.

And like the guy below me said, the part at 1:12 is kind of iffy. I'm not sure if i liked it or not. I think its the third measure of the phrase thats the one out of synch.

The bassline could use some more attention. My favorite part would be around 1:34.

I think you just need to mess with some effects and the synths you are choosing, tweak here and there to make it really great.

Overall it's not too bad.

Anyway if youd like me to give some more reviews on ur stuff, come check out mine and it'll make it easier for me to keep track of you.

DJVI responds:

Thank you for your review. I just fixed the part at 1:12 and I think it's better now.

[~`Belmont, Vampire Killer`~]

Much better this time around

The bassline has a definite groove to it now, which drives the whole thing along.

My only issue is that while it's a loop, you basically repeat the whole song without changing anything. you could add instruments on the same part to give a new sound the second time, double the bassline, add some effects, since its from castlevania im sure you could scrounge up some sound effects to throw in, just bells and whistles like that.

The loop point itself I give an 8 out of 10. I didn't like it hte first time i heard it, but after the third time it sounds pretty good. The timing could just be a teensy wit better so you couldn't actually tell where the loop point it. thats what ur trying to do anyway when you make a loop.

A definite improvement over last time, nice work.

Rhyhart responds:

Yea I will definitely add more stuff to it. I think bells and such would be a nice addition to this. The loop point though I think is because when the song resets on here there's a little space because on the program I was using it repeated with no stop at all. I'm not quite sure though. I think I told you this on the first one but I'm not so hot in the drum are so I will get my friend to help me out on that. Thanks for the review and the advice!!!

[Streetlight Apocalypse]

lets see

piano that comes in at around 1:10 doesnt feel very fitting with the rest of the sound, or whatever instrument around 2:45 either. They just dont seem to match the vibe.

I'm not particularly fond of the tune, and the song doesn't really do much for me.

However, there is very few things WRONG with it, it just doesn't strike a chord with me. I suppose i must wait for lyrics to see.

Didnt like the ending either.

We'll have to see.

jewcurls responds:

Thanks Cardboardowl, I guess I was trying to get some variety of sounds because its the starting track of the album thing I'm working on. Thanks for your kind words.

Jewcurlsssssss

[Classical techno]

good start

the piano could use more echo at th.e start, just a tad more. Whenever you add new instruments, its usually better to fade them in rather than just adding them. The techno jump in at 50 sounds fine though.

The bassline could use a bit more drive, and the beat could be deeper.

Also the sound could use some ornaments and effects at transition points to help add a bit of polish to the song.

After repeating the melody a few times, make it diffrent by changing octaves, stacking instruments, diffrent echoes or rythm breaking and yadayaa.

Definitly a trong start though.

Kadadj responds:

Thanks for the tips, smooth transitions between different variations and new instruments is my biggest problem, got to work on that:)

[RPG Town]

Does the job very well.

8 out of 10 because It does fit the bill very nicely. It sounds exactly like an rpg town would, but you lost those other 2 points cause the tune isn't really memorable, and the games with best music even have town music you remember.

If you wanted to spice it up, at :52 at add another istrument in a diffrent octave, or maybe thirds.

However, a song like this might not need spicing up, hmm?

DaVince responds:

I could have, but it WAS supposed to sound generic or at least not too memorable. If a lot of people turn out using it, this would only be a good thing because it wouldn't sound like the music was particularly "stolen" when someone hears it twice in different places.

Thanks for the suggestion, though. It'll come in handy in future songs, whether intended generic or not.

[Renegade- Sound Obvious]

Takes way too long to get going.

Takes too long to get to the meat of the song, needs more build up of tension, and the transition of tempos wasn't very smooth.

Could use a more interactive baseline.

Kbobossa responds:

I agree with you. But like i said in the description i messed up around 1:00 which is the transition of the tempo. I was recording live and i wasnt really focusing cause i was getting bored playing the slow part. But thanks for the review :)

[KevinRodrigues:-:Lets Go!]

Solid

A decent song without many errors, however it lacks a certain punch.

Even if you have a very good theme going on, generally a song cant only use one the whole time. Mix it up, put stuff inbetween, and have it return often, in diffrent forms, diffrent octaves, add intervals etc.

As of right now it needs a bit of a boost to be a great song.

Pretty solid though.

ToxicBlizzard responds:

Thanks for the help dude (:
Yeah i will be shure to do that
i sertainly felt lack of a puncky thingy too
Reviews like this is what i need
peace bro
KevinRodrigues

[Tiesto - Nyana (Remix)]

Tight opening.

It's sounding pretty good. just a few things.

Whenever u have another instrument join whaevers going on at the time, try letting the parts fade back a bit to ive the new sound more prominence.

The main little accompaning sound does get a it repitive after a while, try changing octaves occasionally to let the song move a bit more, or adding intervals

You could use a bit more of a beat to drive the pulse, and possible more variety of instrument sounds.

As it stands though its a pretty solid song.

I really enjoy the intro and outro. makes for excellent looping.

Kreepman responds:

I'll see what I can cook up!
Thanks for the review!

[The Warzone/My battle field]

needs alot of work

- Rythms are often not lining up correctly-
-The diffrent instruments have a sound that is fighting against each other, not working together.
-String section sounds a bit rough
-Dissocence doesn't resolve
-Around 2:30 the intervals that you were trying to work out had a rough and scratchy sound, needs to be cleaned up.
-Don't let the drums run quite so long without development in some way.
-The song had a sort of reverse develepment, it fell down instead of building up the intense part.
-Didn't enjoy the ending, wasn't stacked together well and was cut off.
-The melody at 4:00 is most certaintly not original, but i cant recall exactly at this time where it was from.

Basically the songs big problem i none of hte parts are working together very well.

Theres some potential in there somewhere, but it needs alot of work.

denme responds:

pretty much the whole idea of ( my battle field)

[Guardian Angel - Chris Gildart]

needs work.

Try to work a bit on the intonaion matching between the guitarr and voice.

You don't need to be sliding into pitches, hit them on the dot, without the adjusting, it makes you sounds sloppy.

Needs more dynamics, it was basically one volume the whole time.

Guitar chords needed to be sustained longer near the end.

As for the lyrics, they were decent, but I'd proly change the refrain every couple of repeats to grab attention.

Then ending could use some work as well.

Sytothe responds:

Thanks man, this is just a rough demo... I'll be working on a new one soon, I'll keep everything in mind