CardboardowI's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[When i was 10]

Unless ur like 13 thats not true

I know because the drum loops you are using from the latest garageband. Ive used a couple of them myself.

[The Warzone/My battle field]

needs alot of work

- Rythms are often not lining up correctly-
-The diffrent instruments have a sound that is fighting against each other, not working together.
-String section sounds a bit rough
-Dissocence doesn't resolve
-Around 2:30 the intervals that you were trying to work out had a rough and scratchy sound, needs to be cleaned up.
-Don't let the drums run quite so long without development in some way.
-The song had a sort of reverse develepment, it fell down instead of building up the intense part.
-Didn't enjoy the ending, wasn't stacked together well and was cut off.
-The melody at 4:00 is most certaintly not original, but i cant recall exactly at this time where it was from.

Basically the songs big problem i none of hte parts are working together very well.

Theres some potential in there somewhere, but it needs alot of work.

denme responds:

pretty much the whole idea of ( my battle field)

[Guardian Angel - Chris Gildart]

needs work.

Try to work a bit on the intonaion matching between the guitarr and voice.

You don't need to be sliding into pitches, hit them on the dot, without the adjusting, it makes you sounds sloppy.

Needs more dynamics, it was basically one volume the whole time.

Guitar chords needed to be sustained longer near the end.

As for the lyrics, they were decent, but I'd proly change the refrain every couple of repeats to grab attention.

Then ending could use some work as well.

Sytothe responds:

Thanks man, this is just a rough demo... I'll be working on a new one soon, I'll keep everything in mind

[Zion 'M']

Needs more

More bass and less repititiveness. Change up the instruments every now and then, maybe give the 16th notes some thirds to work off of, try oing things in octaves.

Its ok.

Moltov responds:

I disagree with the bass part, but maybe it is a little repetitive, a lot of good songs are. thanks for your review.
-Moltov

[Bright Starlight]

hmm

I find the change to the piano at 27 wasnt smooth enough. Id fade it in or something, and I feel like it doesnt go with the synth very well.

The transistions feel a bit too sudden, and it could use with a bit of dynamic level balancing.

Wasnt very fond of the ending.

Its good for an ol dug up project though.

Radidsh responds:

Thanks a lot for listening and for taking your time to review, it is appreciated. =3

This is not one of the projects that I feel are the most successful of mine, hehe. ^^

[Ghost Hour]

It indeed sounds like a ghost hour.

Fits the title very well. I think you could do with some more bells in there and a couple more creepy sound effects and ghost noises and junk to finish it off.

Music wise it sounds pretty good, I'm getting some fuzzy sound on my end but it might just be my speakers.

[Danza del Diablo]

It does sound like it would be in a game.

Well the percussion is pretty darn good but thats the only thing that strikes me as good. Everything else just seems there.

I'm not fond of whatever instrument ur using that sounds kinda like a harpsichord or of the dissonent parts you added in there.

The string section feels thrown in, theres no real tune in there, and They sound particularly fake.

I KNOW the strings are Fake but you used em in a way that brings out the fakeness of their sound.

However it does sound like it would fit certain parts in a game and I wouldnt really complain if i heard it at the right time.

Could be better though.

TheInfinityVirus responds:

Yeah, the strings do kind of feel like they were thrown in. Though to be fair, they were the parts I spent the most time and effort on. But to each his own, right.

It's probably because I wrote the strings as being played on a keyboard, instead of being actually played live. I've still got a few things to learn when it comes to that.

Thanks for the review, brah. Probably one of the most helpful I've gotten in a while. :V

[Lunar Saturations]

Missed oppurtunity

I think at about 58 seconds you have a goood chance to really get the song going and get something good moving.

jk182 responds:

I feel that. Thats actually about where I expect the "chorus" to come in

[xKore + Nechura - Alien]

Forgot

Hehe, i put this loop on and went to other stuff and it ended up playing for like 20 minutes, and never once was I like "Ugh turn that trash off."
Good work.

[Ohio Is Overcrowded]

Good tune, bad bassline

im not very fond of the bassline and the beat you have going is pretty bland.

The actual tune itself isnt bad though.