CardboardowI's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[SR - Dull Points -demo-]

Not sure what your going for.

I don't really like the song. It goes too fast and tries to fit too many notes in such a small amount of time, however I dont know exactly what you made it for, so i cant really give a decent review.

[The Electric Hedgehog Pok]

Funny.

You get an A for lols.
The music doesnt even matter lol.

[Camping Les Tourelles J Sercu]

Good stuff.

As far as waltzes go it's a damn fine waltz. Don't listen to the haters, they are just proly against genre specific things. Otherwise,

Im not very fond of the odd intro. I would just begin the song on the 23 and maybe not add so many instruments, it sounded fine with only the piano being featured.

[out of this world ver.3]

Let down.

I really liked the effects you chose, and with the piano and snare doing their litlte intro i was looking foward to the rest, and I was let down.

Gotta be honest with you, I HATE whatever bass that was. It was awful, It really did hurt my ears. The wavy sound it made was just weird that low, it didn't fit with the piano, yet it took control of the song in a bad way.

Sorry if it upsets you, but i really did not enjoy this, but im pretty sure you could do better, judging from your intro and your ending and your effect choice, in addition the otherwise nice drumming.

Wasnt too fond of the deep drum either.

Better luck next time.

majer responds:

no offense at all friend, that wobble bass is a key sound for the dubstep genrethat i grown fond of
this is also not the final mix and it still needs plenty of work ^_^
thank you for the very honest reveiw
check back time time i would like to see more honest reveiws from you

[Ride the Wave - Electronica]

Good.

I liked the intro, try not to overdo the grace notes. Just because its fast doesnt always make it cooler.

However when It got to one minute, the song was trying too hard. Too much was going on and it almost felt like someone started playing another song at the same time.

Good lil tune though, just remember, faster and more is not always better.

[~|| Sonic&Knuckles Miniboss HH]

It's gettin there.

I like the beat, but im not real into the bass, you could have done a bit better job and giving the bass a purpose other then being underlying sound. It needs to set a tone, since it comes in early. Is the song supposed to be a boss battle or is it supposed to be a dance? Make the bassline set it up so the rest of the parts dont have to work so hard to define it.

Also make sure you don't get tooo far away from the original thing.

Also, the ending felt lazy, like you just decided "ok im done" and you ended the song.

Other then that its decent. Im not gonna download it, but i wouldnt complain if i heard it in a vid somewhere. Always room for improvement though.

T-Free responds:

Thank you very much for the construcive criticism, Cardboardowl! I'll work on the track again, considering what you said. The bass will be a difficult thing to work on, but I'll give my best to make it even better. :)

[SnowStorm (techno)]

boring.

nothing happens in the song really. i know its a work in progress, but you havent really done anything.

Also, names of songs are very important to give the person listening a feeling of what they should be thinking about. This does not feel like a snowstorm at all.

I'd either seriously kick it up a notch or just drop it.

Pokemeon responds:

You know its people like you that suck alot of dick. and how haven't i really done anything? lets see there's the kick snares percussion's bass hats rolls all in so far... as i mentioned its a W.I.P so ofcourse there not alot going on but dont fucking say i haven't done anything.

[Peruvian Nights]

Meh.

I don't see it happening for a race or anything. It starts off way too slow and never has a part where you can get really into it.

The rhythm is akward, and theres no real central theme of it other hten the style if instruments your using.

You switch sounds alot, which is normally good, but theres not enough familar patterns or anything go along for the lisatener to grab ahold onto and make it feel like the song is goin anywhere.

The deep bass drum doesn't feel like its timed correctly.

Personally I think you could have made something good with some of the stuf you have in here, but you put it together akwardly.

IF i were to sum up the song in one word, it would be akward.

GameBoyFireworks responds:

I'm not trying to sound like a dick or anything, but I kinda meant for it to not sound "right". I wrote it in a synthetic key based off a Frigian mode. I wrote it in 4/4 but gave it an almost 9/8 drumbeat... which is a triplet meter. It's not supposed to sound proper, It's really what i was going for. But i completely understand what you mean.

thanks for the feed, man!

[La La]

Good inrto.

I really liked the intro, but i think that the cymbols are a bit overpowering the majority of the time.

I also enjyo the main theme, but the random high notes dont seem to do much other then annoy me.

MormoMaker responds:

Thanks for the review! This was my first FL Studio song, and I'm getting alot better!
Your review will benefit me greatly! *Not an automated message lol*
:3

[Mario At The Riverside]

I'm not feelin it

Aside from the mario sounds, like the coin jumping and his voice, you woudln't know it was a mario refrence, until around 2:00

Also, it doesn't really sound like a riverside, it sounds more like a city scape or a carnival at night or something.

Not really feelin this song, sorry bro.

Foraum responds:

Ouch! if you're not feeling it, you're not feeling it, it's your opinion and I respect that.
But I have to set a couple things straight.

First: This is not a mario remix, my intention was to use mario elements (most notably Super Mario Bros. 1) and remix the song Riverside with "some" of them. (shell, jump, overworld song elements, game over song elements, voice mario64)
Think mashup.

Second: Riverside is a song by Sidney Samson, a dutch "dirty" house producer. He used a sample from the movie Juice where actor Tupac Shakur says "Riverside, motherf$%*er" before he executes his first victim. So the title is based on that. I used this sample too but pitch-stretched it.

Guess I'm a little surprised you gave this a 3 based on those arguments. Maybe listen to the original, it's on youtube.

Thanks anyway
Foraum